Writing with detail

Last Monday we watched a short video from the Literacy Shed. We talked about what had happened and then Mrs B took a screen shot of the opening scene. With a partner, we wrote one sentence about something we could see the picture. We had to remember what made a sentence - starting with a capital, ending with a full stop, finger spaces, one idea and that it made sense. We then shared our sentences. Some students wrote about the clouds, others wrote about the clock tower and the balloons. We talked about what made one sentences more interesting to read then another. We also had to remember to write a sentence about what we saw in the picture, not something that had happened later in the video. It was a good lesson in writing with detail and we learnt that pages and pages of writing doesn't necessarily make for amazing writing. Here's our finished description.