Trit, trot, trit, trot. My hooves walked across the gravel. I tried my hardest to pull the people. I was tired. I couldn't do it any more. Go to the Five Sentence Challenge website to see the picture that was the prompt for this week.
Hi Layla. I really like how you have chosen to write as one of the horses in the picture. Your opening sentence really captures the readers attention. Next time you could try using a connective like and or because so that you have a longer sentence as well.
Miss Dippie (5SC Team) Sumner, New Zealand http://room2sumner2014.blogspot.co.nz/
Hi Layla!
ReplyDeleteI really like you opening sounds to this story. It really made me want to read on! Well done!!
Could you think of another word for 'tired'?
Mrs Thwaites (Team 5SC)
Hi Layla. I really like how you have chosen to write as one of the horses in the picture. Your opening sentence really captures the readers attention.
ReplyDeleteNext time you could try using a connective like and or because so that you have a longer sentence as well.
Miss Dippie (5SC Team)
Sumner, New Zealand
http://room2sumner2014.blogspot.co.nz/